Can I Get A...

by Joy   Mar 27, 2009


I know my writing is worth it
Can i get a vote, a rating or two
i vote honestly and comment often
even mine have been commented by a few

i write my poor heart out every once in a while
hoping that someone will relate
still i see hundreds of view, on one poem
and no one took the time out to rate

im not gonna beg, or submit annoying quotes
im gonna be patient and hold on a while
when i finally sign on and see some votes
i'll log out and walk away with a smile =)

*please read my writing, vote honestly and leave legit comments, full of veracity and constructive criticism.

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  • 14 years ago

    by Fran

    I hope you will be patient and hold on because for all it's rough edges grammatically speaking, this poem is both imaginative and funny. You have talent, well done!

  • 14 years ago

    by hayden

    Lol very funny i know what you mean, like the rhyming scheme

  • 14 years ago

    by Joy

    Thank...you?

  • 14 years ago

    by Inside the Liar

    Hello. I stumbled across your profile and figured I'd comment.

    I know my writing is worth it
    Can i get a vote, a ratingt or two
    ive vote honestly and comment often
    even mine have been commented by a few
    ^^
    'Ratingt' should be 'rating.' Also, the 'I've' in the third line isn't neccesary, and it makes the line grammactically incorrect. I would suggust changing it to "I." This stanza wasn't particularly strong, in my opinion. I felt as though you didn't really think about what you were writing.

    i write my poor heart out every once in a while
    hoping that someone will relate
    still i see hundreds of views, on one poem
    and no one took the time out to even rate
    ^^
    The first line is too long. It cuts off the flow and makes the rest of the stanza appear choppy.
    Not everyone who visits your poems is going to vote. Don't let it get you down.

    im not gonna beg, or submit annoying quotes
    im gonna be patient and hold on a while
    when i finally sign on and see some votes
    i'll log out and walk away with a smile =)
    ^^
    The last line was cute. Although, in a way, you are asking people to comment and rate by writing this poem.

    I would suggust taking off the bit at the end. It goes against site rules to ask for people to read your work anywhere except the designated forums. All in all, it was an okay poem, but I didn't get anything from it. It didn't feel as though you were really trying.
    I won't rate, because I don't believe in downvoting. I only rate a piece if I think it's worth a five. Which I don't think this is.
    If writing is what you love, then keep doing it. Don't let the fact that you aren't receiving comments discourage you.