Comments : Masks of Youth

  • 14 years ago

    by mandy

    Very interesting and well written. Word of caution though: you've seemed to put it as if every teenager acts this way through their youth, but be careful, and consider that some may disagree with what you say. Try to picture the whole world, and maybe you'll get a diffrent picture. Anyways, I think it was a good write and a good point, and that most of what you say was true. I for one, could relate to your poem, 4/5.

  • 14 years ago

    by PoetryKnight

    When I was growing up, my father had hundreds of masks. each on representing something else, sorrow, joy, pain, sadness, ect.
    And I learned from them, that no matter how you feel, as long as you put those masks on. no one can tell how you truly feel. also, good poem, a 5/5 indeed. keep it up.
    Signed
    The Spirit of the Poetry Knight

  • 14 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Yes Lisa, you are so right. I have seen it happen so many times..all those young guns who said they would change the world and the young chicks..so determined not to end up like their mum..and they all ended up leading the same life as their parents.
    It doesn't have to be this way, if you dare to be and stay true to yourself..

    Good poem, it shows your intelligence:)

    Take care,

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 14 years ago

    by Jad

    Teenage thrills is what we crave,
    We wear our smiles and masks of brave,
    Hide our terrors deep down within,
    For dishonesty is our greatest sin.
    Lets trick the truth so we'll believe,
    And in our mess let others grieve,
    No time for love, no time for pain,
    Just foolish acts to take the blame.

    This was a great first stanza and the emotion was good and so was the flow. The emotion stood out.

    We'll drink to sorrow, we'll drink to joy,
    We'll play emotion like an over used toy,
    No past to regret, no future to gain,
    Just the present to live without any shame.
    Hearts break, tears fall, it doesn't change a thing,
    Generation after generation feel this teenage sting,
    We'll follow the footsteps and idolize the fakes,
    Ignoring past experiences we'll make the same mistakes.

    Every word is true and the flow and rhyme was once again great.

    But the day will come when we mature,
    And settle down for nothing more,
    Than recycled dreams of a brighter shade,
    As our treasured thrills begin to fade.
    Pur robot future lies close ahead,
    We're back to back uniformed in dread,
    So raise your chin and prefect your mask,
    This teenage freedoms not made to last.

    This was a good last stanza and the emotion and flow and rhyme was awesome. Only mistake was in the 5th stanza The first word should be "poor" unless pur was what you meant there.

    Over all this was a well written poem with really good emotion. excellent job.

  • 14 years ago

    by Brad Quammen

    Wow... I would just say that because I'm rather speechless but...wow... My favorite stanza was...

    "But the day will come when we mature,
    And settle down for nothing more,
    Than recycled dreams of a brighter shade,
    As our treasured thrills begin to fade."

    That was a really creative way to describe the way most have experienced life. Another well written poem more than deserving of a 5. ^_~"

  • 14 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    Kind of reminds me of my teen years

  • 14 years ago

    by DreamingOutLoud

    I enjoyed reading this poem, nice work!