Abuse Something Else

Lick off all the leeches
drowning in diluted skin;

*This gave me a creepy feeling. But it also made me want to keep reading too.*

tastes like living alcohol,
carving a face to the inside of my cheek
and suffocating it.

*I love the use of personification here. It makes your words even more powerful*

I am a substance
conjoined to emotions
by the bone of agony ...
another beautiful me,
juxtaposed incompleteness
for rape of memory.

*Wow....this was such a deep stanza. It's just overflowing with imagery and clever word play. I loved it. Honestly this stanza could stand alone...that's how good it is*

Leeches penetrating
for difficult mating;
in making one more Jesus
to put in glass,
labeled for abandonment and abuse,
a substance for no excuse.

*This was such a good ending. Wow... I think you did a wonderful job with this. I think it's so advanced and mature. I love the words you use and the style ties everything together well. Keep it up. Nik*