Satan's Reward
by Cindy Apr 8, 2009
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Plagued with agonizing pain |
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15 years ago
by Corinne
Cindy! This is so dark and so powerful. Very well crafted
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15 years ago
by anand singh
I can't remember if I've read a dark poem from you before but sure happy that I read this one.
You've done an excellent job in describing the rewards that awaits those with vile thoughts and evil tendencies.
Your wording was excellent and the flow from starting to end was flawless.Awesome and superbly penned.
Keep up the great work my friend.
Paul... -
15 years ago
by ben thompson
Very good, i'm impressed 5/5
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15 years ago
by Blissful
The title really caught my eye so I was eager to read the piece. :]
What an amazing first stanza! It caught me right from the beginning and had me captivated with your words.
"Suffering screams of the mind"
^Great use or alliteration. The "s" sound sounds evil in a way like a snake which fit in nicely with what you were getting across. I dont know if you did it on purpose or not but either way it worked.
"Afflicted, distorted, disfigured"
^I LOVED this sounded! So horrific and wretched. I could feel what you were saying but just the sound of the words alone without even looking at its meaning. Great play on words...very poetic. Loved your word choice.
I loved how you continued the "s" sound throughout your poem. It was a very consistent move and truly made the meaning behind the poem more effective in its message. A very poetic move indeed and one that made the poem as a whole stand out ot me.
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Violent seizures, rabid tongue
Charred, scorched, rot, decay
Molten lava, fiery death
Reward for Satan's play"
^Great ending! Loved how you put the title in at the end. Nice way to close such an amazing piece.
Your flow was so flawless throughout the whole piece which made for an easy and fluid read. Loved your rhyme scheme because it didnt seem forced but just read naturally. I liked how it was different from the normal reads you see everyday because I felt as if it took me to another place, away form my reality.
Well done!
I really am glad I read this.
*5/5*
Bliss. [Beyond a Poet's Mind.] -
15 years ago
Great dark write Cindy, I really enjoyed it, the only advice I can off is watch you syllable count, a couple of your lines were a little off. The opening stanza was right on for me and I like your last two lines. Nice work :)
