Comments : Paper Roses

  • 8 years ago

    by Lu

    Such a sweet poem Darien !!!!

    In our bed of red roses and paper,
    I write you letters on each petal.
    Of daydreams and wishes I've had,
    and the life we will have together.
    ^^^
    Loved this part !
    Such a lucky girl you have Darien .... songs and poems ... every girls dream

  • 8 years ago

    by Chelsey

    Ughhhh...I wish you had a twin...I need someone who can express his feelings the way you do! This was beautiful..Your girlfriend is really lucky

  • 8 years ago

    by mossgirl19

    This is so sweet...you're so thoughtful Poet Darien...
    This is another favorite piece...

  • 8 years ago

    by ether

    Cuuuuuuuute as.
    Very cute, Darien.

  • 8 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Darien, I've always loved your love poems. This was good, but I felt it wasn't your best. The overall imagery was good which I liked. The first stanza I thought was a little sloppy compared to the second, just my opinion of course. I also didn't really like the ending, you built the poem up for the driving punch at the end, which I felt you didn't deliver. With a little tweaking here and there, I think this poem can be fantastic. Keep up the good work my friend.

    Peace, Joe

  • 7 years ago

    by Brittney Follett

    This poem is just too adorable. Love is a truly amazing thing. I was wondering where you were going with the paper and roses but at the end you explained and it was a very creative idea. Very unique. Tying something all of us to (choosing a flower and picking off the petals trying to figure out if we are loved or not). With your poetic idea.
    My favorite stanza was:
    In our bed of red roses and paper,
    I write you letters on each petal.
    Of daydreams and wishes I've had,
    and the life we will have together.
    Just so sweet.

    Beautiful
    5/5

  • 5 years ago

    by Rihanna

    Wow this is sooo beatiful(:

    I loved the ending

    He loves me,
    He loves me not,
    He loves me.
    He truly loves me.

    ^^ flawles(: love
    5/5 from me ...the sweetest poem ever

    xx

  • 4 years ago

    by BlueJay

    I cant say this piece is perfect, it seems a little plain. But I can say it is a nice idea and that i enjoy the style. Maybe if you used a move varried set of descriptions i would enjoy it more; I mean it just needs something (to me at least. Granted you seem to have many fans so... Im probably just weird)

    However I do think this piece has some great potential and I like the way your voice shines and the emotion is unmistakeable.

    4/5