When The Stars Come Out

by BlueEyedMystery   Apr 25, 2009


Summer sweats out
burned apologies, leaking
from cracked pillows
that taste of sunshine.

Dew drops, so bitter,
as they run down cheeks,
like rivers rippling through flesh.
Dim your world
behind shades dark enough
to blind those feelings
forever.

Or at least until the stars come out.

It blows through your hair,
tickles like fur from the collar
of an expensive coat.

Regret.
Guilt.

Wishing he was here
forever.

Or at least when the stars come out.

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  • 14 years ago

    by Lauren

    I really like this. You use alot of imagery which is one of the things I really like in poems. It's worded very well, and written very well. The second stanza is amazing!!!!!! I trully love how you worded it and used imagery and metaphors!! Brilliant Job!!!!!!!!!!!

  • 14 years ago

    by PygmyPuff

    The first two stanzas are very strong. I love the vocab and the intense imagery that it brings. However the next three stanzas dont add up to that. I understand the purpose of the stanza with only the two words, to make the reader pause and consider. however if the stanzas before and after have some more depth, the poem as a whole will increase. Also, the line that repeates, i would recomend changing one line just a little, for a little spice at the end. The same line exactly the same in this case does not do anything.

  • 14 years ago

    by Jad

    Interesting read and this was a good poem. The flow was pretty good for the most part and the way you expressed the emotion in the poem was good as well.

  • 14 years ago

    by Ill Give Blood To Your Dried Veins

    This was so amazing. I loved it. XD

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