Great poem i loved the style and the way you worded it 5/5 keep it up

Lol, I like this, it made me smile, even though I kind of think that was an undesired effect, but I like it.

This is wow. You start off really bold and end with a lot of simplicity. For so few words it is amazing and has such power, granted it is depressing, but you get my point. 5/5 for sure.