The title caught my eye because it reminded me of a song we learned about in my music class called "Up and Down" which I really liked so I was lured in to read your poem haha.
I loved how you smushed the words together because it gives a visual meaning to the words on top of literal meaning as well. very creativea and quite effective.
^And on contrast I loved how you split this up to represent the distance expressed in your words.
"I could whisper all of my
you would hear me. "
^This just broke my heart because I know where you are coming from. Sometimes we have so much inside of us that we wish to get out but only if someone is actually hearing us not just listening.
Visually this poem was just great! I love when people take risks in their writing, its quite appealing to the eye and refreshing to see something new. I loved the emotion you expressed and the bit of childlike tone in your voice. It shows no matter how strong a person is, love always makes them weak. You spoke from the heart which makes it easier for people to relate with your words...I know I did. Well written!