Comments : Child's Gift ( Senryu by Maya and Kiko)

  • 14 years ago

    by Sylvia

    Mementos like this create wonderful memories. I remember the rose I put in a book, how I put it between pieces of wax paper so it would not stick to the pages of the book. Sad thing is now I have no idea where that rose is now. Well done.

  • 14 years ago

    by kelleyana

    I usually put roses or beautiful leaves in books and as time goes by, the roses fades, and even the leaves got dried up, but it it brings back memories of the day and the reasons i placed it there.
    Well done,5/5, kel.

  • 14 years ago

    by SADADDY

    A wonderful memory and thought, thanks for sharing your work with us.

    sadaddy

  • 14 years ago

    by mandy

    Short and sweet! Nicely written, 5/5.

    -mandy :)

  • 14 years ago

    by Robert Gardiner

    Nicely Done!!!

  • 14 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    You two are something, you sure write a beautiful collab, nice work! Great description and visuals, you captured my attention and I wante more!

    5/5 from me, keep writing forever and always...

    ~MaryAnne

  • 14 years ago

    by anand singh

    These are little keepsakes of the heart that brings back beautiful memories to one's mind.
    Short but sweet and effective write.
    keep up the good work my friend.
    Paul...

  • 8 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Hello Ingrid,

    I thought I would read back and I discovered this gem.

    A brittle daisy
    ^
    A simple flower, some may say a weed flower. This flower is beautiful and in its simple form is elegant. Choosing this brittle one. I see a elegant flower with petals slightly crumpled and not perfect. Already this reader cares for this flower, an under dog so to speak.

    pressed between faded pages
    ^
    The fact that the lover of this trophy. I assume a trophy of their lover has carefully preserved this 'weed' in between pages is testament of their love. A nurturing love. The pages are faded, so this picture is of a love that once was, or still is and the lover is merely reflecting on this happy memory - much like, looking back on an old family album where the pictures have faded yellow. They are simply the best pictures I have. Old memories seem to be the sweetest.

    token of love
    ^
    true to the Senryu form - this last line is the culmination of the previous two. A token of love. In this poem an etched memory of love from the past. This past concept allows this reader to assume the back story.

    Great collaboration by brilliant writers.

    take care ((hugs)) xx