Visible Flaws.

by Courageous Dreamer   May 16, 2009


I havent wrote in a while, but heres the end result.

- - - - - -
Visible flaws blind her from the beauty
that she possesses outside and in.

Constantly distracted by the endless
imperfections, that many consider attractive.

Oh, how they seem so transparent
through eyes that have experienced
a lifetime of ups and downs.

Hope sprinkles in vast amounts,
yets slides through her fingers...
leaving the soul striving for optimism...

...while pessimism rings in her ears,
and departs from her lips.

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  • 14 years ago

    by Hallo A Lilium

    Flaws**
    xD

  • 14 years ago

    by Hallo A Lilium

    I can fully relate to this poem. It's hard to hold onto happiness when the flows no one can see become noticeable to yourself. But sometimes they can be seen like you put here. And they are thought to be beautiful. It's hard to describe in words how much our flaws make us suffer. They render some of us immobile. Causing others to maintain a certain stability. We always tell ourselves we need to change. In little ways or even big ways. But do we truly ever change in truth? We might start to conquer our fears. And live life with optimism. But being pessimistic sometimes is natural. We cannot always hope to be hopeful. There are times when pity and remorse take a hold. However it is the one with strength that will pull through. An true optimistic individual always regains their senses. I loved this poem as well. I am adding it to my favorites. And you to my favorite authors. Great piece.

    5/5

    -FeignOctober

  • 14 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    I like your word choice and the message in this piece. I do not care for the structure of just having couplets standing alone and then a stanza then a couplet........I would have rather seen it as a couple stanza structure. Nice job though!

  • 14 years ago

    by Sylvia

    We all at times overlook the beauty that we have within. I think society causes us to see the supposed flaws on the outside and blinds our eyes to internal beauty. Well done.

  • 14 years ago

    by Grace

    Ahh i love this =]
    love love love x 23579837523

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