Comments : In My Life

  • 8 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    I thought this was a very deep and heartfelt piece, well-wriiten and I enjoyed this new poem of yours.

    "Pain has been no stranger
    At times my only friend
    Stroked me gently, broke me down
    Convinced I'd never mend"

    This stanza really helps the reader feel what is going on and what you are feeling, excellent word choice that immediately draws the reader in.

    "Joy has drove it all away
    And shown me how to live
    It's healing waters cleanse the soul
    And teach me to forgive"

    I thought this was very unique, saying how pain was always with you then joy came along and changed you. Wonderful descriptions of joy that helped get you back on track.

    "Each path I take leads somewhere new
    I thought I'd never go
    While trapped inside the bitterness
    That seems to love me so"

    The emotions you are feeling pour out here, and what true words, each path you take does lead somewhere new, whether good or bad.

    "Up or down, in or out
    I'll walk into tomorrow
    Head held high for I survived
    Through madness, joy and sorrow "

    That's the spirit! Never give up and hold your head high.

    5/5 from me, this was a touching poem to read, thanks for posting it for all to read.

    Take care and God Bless You!

    ~MaryAnne

  • 8 years ago

    by Lu

    Pain has been no stranger
    At times my only friend
    Stroked me gently, broke me down
    Convinced I'd never mend
    ^^^
    I love your opening Jenn. I think it makes people feel "not so alone" in their feelings. Just knowing that you too "were convinced you'd never mend" but did. Brings hope to those struggling with their own pain.

    Joy has drove it all away
    And shown me how to live
    It's healing waters cleanse the soul
    And teach me to forgive
    ^^^
    And here is the hope that I mentioned earlier. Joy came (even though we think it never will) and swept that pain right out the door.

    Up or down, in or out
    I'll walk into tomorrow
    Head held high for I survived
    Through madness, joy and sorrow

    ^^^
    Love this ending !!!! No matter how hard it gets, tomorrow is a new day. And "one" of those tomorrows will bring peace within. We just have to keep walking with our head held high and hope in our hearts.

    Wonderful challenge poem Jenn. Loved the read ~hugs~

  • 8 years ago

    by debbylyn

    Nicely rhymed with an excellent flow. I love the quiet uplifting tone of rising above adversity and coming our a winner!

  • 8 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    I love the catchy rhythm your poems always have. You never force the rhyme and make perfect sense. This piece is thought provoking and raw, real emotion the majority of people can relate to this. Excellent job!

  • 8 years ago

    by Sylvia

    Overall well written and expresses life's lessons very well. The flow is good except in one line.

    Joy has drove it all away

    I believe the word drove should be driven. Other than that one thing, well done.

  • 8 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    I think driven would throw off the flow. Unless you said Joy has driven it away.

    I like it just the way it is!

  • 8 years ago

    by Knee

    Didn't I read this poem? I have such a bad memory nowadays.

    "Joy has drove it all away"
    ^isn't "drove" supposed to be "driven" ?

    I loved the first stanza, I think you do know how to begin your poems, and end them as well..
    Great work Jenn :)
    Write on!

  • 8 years ago

    by Lu

    Congrats on your front page win Jenn, very deserving hun !!!!

  • 8 years ago

    by Pain Puppet

    Qoshh.!! i love this poem.

  • 8 years ago

    by nadsyy

    This was a really strong & touching!

    Head held high for I survived
    Through madness, joy and sorrow

    MY FAV PART!

  • 8 years ago

    by HidinVictim

    This is one of the most beautiful pieces I have everhad the pleasure of reading, wonderful job... your first stanza is great a perfect opener.. keep up the great job 5/5

  • 8 years ago

    by Timothy r

    Boy, after reading all of the comments what could I really say, except absolutely breathtaking!! Timothy r