Comments : Forgiven?

  • 14 years ago

    by Andrew

    Its a short poem but with vast emotions. Some parts really caught my eye, like when you said "its so hard for this emotion to be smothered, hiding them so deem, where theyve always been". And "wanting everything now the feeling amplified, but knowing that love is there, but yet so far away". I can truely relate to those section. The way you started it in my opinion was not the best way, try to review it somehow. Generally, great write.

  • 14 years ago

    by BurriedFaceDown

    It's really sweet and beautiful, rhyme and stuff didn't seem to be your concern in the poem. but it still flowed great.

  • 14 years ago

    by XxBabii GirlxX

    It was short but it had lots of emotion.
    it was a really sweet peom.
    keep up the great work
    >>Dominique<<