Comments : Mischief Maker

  • 14 years ago

    by Steady Stereotype

    Another great write. It was simple a sweet. With gentle words to speak to your sister and yet portraying the emotions that you felt about it all.

    'You do anything you want
    Not caring about who you hurt along the way
    Did i ever tell you
    Your mischief caused me to cut today'

    ^This was my favorite stanza. The way you added in the last line was moving, because you seemed to say it as if it were nothing and that in itself is sad. 5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    This is so sad. It was almost like a letter to your sister. I like how clearly you express your feelings and how she's hurting you. I love the details, I read this and wasn't left confused. One of your best I think. Nik

  • 14 years ago

    by XxFallenxFromxGracexX

    Good job, very emotional and sad. The rhyming was good and flowed well
    keep it up =]

    xoxo

  • 14 years ago

    by Hallo A Lilium

    This was very heartbreaking. And the emotions that were laced within each stanza held deep tints of sorrow and anguish. I love the way you performed each verse. They each were exercised perfectly. You captured the essence of pity and remorse. A combination that subdues a person's faith in other's. I could feel the intense drawing of regret. You also have a battle between anger and silence. I believe you wanted to inform your sibling of her mistakes and the problems they cause. Or perhaps that she is creating trouble for you. A dosage of guilt maybe. Guilt that you let her get to you. And also because you wish you didn't have to suffer and go through pain while she obviously is herself? You cut because of the ache inside. That expression that only cutters usually can identify with the most. Self Blame. I'm terribly sorry for whatever heartache you have come to live by. It's difficult to make ones self stronger in those situations. But we all must conquer our fears and face tribulations with pride and with self love. Cutter's like you and I have the hardest times coming by faith in ourselves. I know you can survive with your own will and encouragement. Very beautiful poem. Sad and full of depth and meaning.
    5/5

    -Lilium