Comments : Why I Sing

  • 8 years ago

    by LameOANDSuperDork

    I agree with the other two. It really touched my heart. I loved how you put the seasons in your poem which to me showed even stronger emotion. The last line really blew me away. Officially one of my favorites now~

  • 8 years ago

    by Aish

    That was really good-only problem was the rhythm and flow in the 3rd last stanza-just didnt work as well as the rest of the poem-but all in all fantastic.

    Loved the development throughout-nice use of structure.

    Very emotional, nice imagery and description.

    1st and last stanzas were my favourite =) great work-
    5/5
    aish
    xx

  • 8 years ago

    by Jad

    Well first off I'm glad that you asked me to read this becausue it is really a wonderful poem. The imagery in this poem was wonderful and breathe taking. The flow of the poem was also good as well as your poems rhyme. The cpontext of the poem was awesome and can be true in an way. The poem also had really, really good emotion and you clearly made it clear with yuor word choice and also the way you expressed yourself was good.
    All in alll you did a really good poem and I don't think you need to chage this poem because you made it the best it could have been. So once again good job. 5/5

  • 8 years ago

    by Dying on the inside

    This poem is really good. I love how u compare things and how its some what. metephoric. Really good poem. "if ur reading this i love how u lie to me" this line seems to be screaming with pain andn makes me think ku want him to read it. Good job over all 5/5 ur best yet

  • 8 years ago

    by Im a poetic scholar

    So much feelings i love it

  • 8 years ago

    by Black fox

    Wow that was really powerful you could feel the emotion as you read it the structure it very well laid out the rythem is so steady you could dance to it as you read it the similes really capture the intense feelings that went into this poem and how you smoothly moved from season to season and the imagery is fantastic

    well done

  • 8 years ago

    by Kimberley

    Wow this is such a beuatiful poem. filled with sorrow but still so moving. i love those kind of poems. i especially liked the part about Romeo & Juliet. I for one am a big Shakspeare fan (he's my hero, my idol and my insperation) and the fact that you included that little snippet brings me closer to the poem. I love. 5/5. wonderful.

  • 8 years ago

    by XxFallenxFromxGracexX

    Wow this was really good, so emotional and sad. The rhyming you used was great and the poem flowed easily really really great
    xoxo

  • 8 years ago

    by Steady Stereotype

    This was beautifully written. Various literary sources mixed in with a beautiful metaphoric sense and imagination to portray a simple sad emotion. With so many techniques you had used to explore it, you showed how much something affected you,and you did it wonderfully so. 5/5

  • 8 years ago

    by Hollow Emotion

    Omg, this is awesome... definetly some of your best work!! I absolutly LOVE the flow and how the whole thing ended; and just everything in between!! Its awesome... keep it up!
    *Tracy*

  • 8 years ago

    by Cindy

    What a very heartfelt write. The emotions pour from your words and can be felt in the heart of the reader.
    Great job!
    Take Care
    Cindy

  • 8 years ago

    by Saul

    Wow! This one is incredible!! Great work!!

  • 8 years ago

    by Ray Smallshaw

    Hi! Shanik,
    It saddens me when I read a poem of such intent sorrow which is written by someone so young yet it also gladdens my heart that the poem is so well composed, a contradiction I know but true. That is why I gave you a 5/5 score. At nearly sixty one life to me has been so special I want everybody to have enjoyed what has past in it as much as I have, write us all a couple of fun or love poems that are warm and not chilling. Ray S

  • 8 years ago

    by Wishmaster

    This is brilliant, I love the contradictions that you make so often in this poem. It realls shows the heartbreak of the writer. Once again, great poem!

    5/5
    Wishmaster

  • 8 years ago

    by guy named Guy

    This is a very powerful poem.. i think your right when you said it was your best yet.. really well thought.. to what i think.. well first of all im deeply saddened.. cause if im right im the person this poem is to.. its a realy well put poem.. i love it.. sorry if my response to this poem is so short.. i dont really like to talk alot.. so forgive me.. k.. eye <3 u shanik.. i truly know this now..

  • 8 years ago

    by cupcake

    I love this poem is so powerful it speaks to me so much emotion i can feel ur pain when i read this this is a 5/5 its reallly gd

  • 8 years ago

    by Lemon Squeezy

    Its real good nik flows nice and has a great ending 5

  • 8 years ago

    by Fading Memory

    Well i have no enough worz 2 speak ot ma emotions so i,ll jus gonna say gr8 wrk 100/10 keep the great work up ":)

  • 8 years ago

    by cowgirlstar26

    Back to spring with rain that never stops
    So many internal twist and turns I got myself lost.
    I fell for a guy, my husband to be
    If your reading this, I love how you lie to me.

    Lets walk back to winter with her frozen truths
    Heated by fixation I miss being bruised
    Beaten by thoughts and hate filled glances
    I miss my Romeo, Juliet by herself sounds so tragic.

    fav stanzas

    5/5 love this piece!

  • 8 years ago

    by Angie

    First, I'd like thank you so much for you comment on my write.

    This write of yours is quite powerful and filled with sorrow yet beautiful at the same time. The emotions just pour out pulling on the readers heartstrings causing them to feel the pain from within. The last stanza, for me personally, is my favorite and makes it a perfect ending...

    Very well done!!