Empty Heart (Triolet)

A very cute and simple and moving poem. Its to the point with strong meaning. Great job.

victoria

Awww... wonderful!! So simple yet beautiful! Great job :)

This was a well written poem, not the best but still well done. The flow was wonderful as well as capturing the attention of the audience with something filled with emotion, and yet with a vague enough topic so everyone can relate.

"My heart is now all empty inside.
Now where does my love abide?"

^I found the repetition of these lines to be good, but not as powerful as it could have been. Perhaps a different wording, a different line or a completely different idea altogether?

Heartfilled. short and sweet. 5/5

A very short yet powerfull poem =] Again your wording added more depth to the piece and created the imagery within my head, The use of repetition was also a nice touch. The structure is really very good and the flow was perfect.