Comments : The Quiet Things That No One Ever Knows

  • 14 years ago

    by ether

    "I falter between the line of friends and enemies."
    Sounds like you're writing about E and I.

    I like this, Tamara, good work.

    Only one thing I want you to know: try and expand your vocab with metaphors or something a little more. Solemnly isn't that great of a word.
    And typo in your last line "too" to "to".

    Sorry to seem so negative. Keep writing!