Hmmm....this is very John Donne...

Well I was really interested in this poem, It was very captivating =] The flow worked quite well and your chioce of wording suited the style of the piece perfectly. Overall a very good write, great job.

Aww... I really like this poem! It's so different and interesting! I love how you've created animal imagery and I think you've referred yourself to a wolf. I really like that. It was a very well-written poem! I especially loved the lines:

"We are murdered,
by being alive,
but in my six feet of miss you moments
I pass a moment, to revive;"

Great job! :)