Paint Me Something

by Jennifer RIP Lesthat Hayden   Jun 12, 2009


Splatter red on my canvas, so pale,
and watch the paint drops bleed.
Feel the texture, bumps like Braille,
but to no language do they lead.

Lightly coat the brush's bristles
with your deepest shade of black.
Twist the brush to resemble thistles
and allow the paint to stack.

Draw me a line of royal blue
across the painted plaque.
Move on to a different hue
and derail from the solid track.

Raindrops of yellow shower down;
some colliding, some dispersing.
They circle around like a crown
as if they've been rehearsing.

Nothing can take away its personality
and nothing will ever come near.
It's an abstract art piece with originality
and each coat of paint is sincere.

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  • 14 years ago

    by Nee

    There were too many fillers in this piece, especially the and's..almost at the end of each stanza there's a filler word.

    "It's an abstract art piece with originality"
    ^The syllable count here went a little bit of, comparing to the rest of the stanza.

    Your ending didn't say much.
    a good write though.
    Write on~ :)

  • 14 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    I really enjoyed this piece. You used such lovely wording and I could really see what you were doing. I love the imagery. The imagery you used made this more than just a poem but a painting. Very beautiful work Jen. Keep it up :) Nik

  • 14 years ago

    by Sylvia

    I enjoyed this very much. While reading, I could literally see an artist stand before an easel painting a picture, choosing colors, dipping the brush. Well done.

  • 14 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Wow, this was a masterpiece, I loved it. I wish I didn't use all my nominations, otherwise I'd nominate this. The flow, structure and deepth was fantastic. I liked your choice of wording, it was as if you 'painted' a painting with words. Excellent work, keep up the great work.

    Peace, Joe

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