Fruition.

by mnemosyne   Jun 20, 2009


My thoughts are overripe apples,
falling down from a tree of
Impracticality,
begging me to let them be:
a root of Possibility.

They set themselves atop the grass,
and while basking in decision,
I dawdle from their path
with frantic competition
between my two
left feet.

What am I to say to those who
long to question my ideas of
resting down just where he is?

Uncertain
as I may be, a wealth
of courage blooms inside of
me, and from his trunk to mine,
I find perfection guides and guards
our sweet catacombs of borrowed time.

Allow me
to evaporate and swell
into the skies, whose mouth
opens wide at my swift replies;
Climbing the tree of mysteries with
nothing but a fistful of apple seeds.

June 19th 2009 :]
(c) Novalyn Grace RRL

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  • 8 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    Maybe the most original poem I have read. It was so well done. Brilliant is the word that comes to mind.
    The flow , the imagery the imagination you have a complete and fantastic write.

  • 8 years ago

    by Dark Secrets

    Wow!!! this is really good work. I like how you stuck to the apple tree as a metephore sorta topic for your poem and then zoomed in to describe the apple which is the your accomplishment and then moved to the seeds inside the apple which means that the production never ends and it moves through generation. The tittle is what caught my eye and made me want to read it, because it is one simple word which makes you ponder on what the poem might be about.
    However I didn't understand who it is you are reffering to by using "he". At first it seems you're reffering to someone you look up to then it seems like you're reffering to the tree and at the end it seems like you're reffering to god.
    Anyway, I enjoyed reading your poem, it was entertaining and beautiful, few people write about knowledge and accomplishment these days.

  • 8 years ago

    by ASPHYXIATED

    You. Are. Amazing.

    First off, the title.
    Oh my, straight away I was hooked.
    From one word I just craved more, exactly what a title should be doing, attracting the reader not scaring them away.

    "My thoughts are overripe apples,
    falling down from a tree of
    Impracticality,"
    `I absolutely adored how you capitalized "Impracticality", its a technique you don't see very often yet its so strong for the poem. Shows the reader importance of certain words that could go unseen. Excellent. Also "Possibility" further down. Your opening was amazing, if the title didn't drag the reader in that sure as hell would.

    I fricken love your personification of your thoughts, its so original. Something I'd only expect from you. Fantastic.

    "What am I to say to those who
    long to question my ideas of
    resting down just where he is?"
    `Usually sentences of this length would mess a poem up, throw off the flow and be too much of a mouthfull--
    but of course you pulled it off. You kept it simple yet really make my mind work, which is barely does. ;)
    I love the phrase "who long to", its just so poetic and beautiful.

    The ending was perfect,
    you pulled it all back to the metaphor of apples which concluded it lovely.

    There is not a thing I could critique on in this poem, love. It well deserved the win. Amazing work, speechless. <3

  • 8 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    "My thoughts are overripe apples,
    falling down from a tree of
    Impracticality,
    begging me to let them be:
    a root of Possibility."

    Wow, this is a breathtaking first stanza, this hit the reader and just took their breath away! The metaphor was fresh and new, I would have never thought of that. I really liked the imagery portrayed, which brought this piece alive to the reader. Wonderful work!

    "They set themselves atop the grass,
    and while basking in decision,"

    I really like these two lines, and found them to be very captivating. I never heard of "basking in decision", because as Temps said it "basking" reminds me of someone bathing in sun. So great job with originality here!

    "I dawdle from their path
    with frantic competition
    between my two
    left feet."

    I loved the word choice, you really have a way with capturing the reader's attention, holding it there and not boring them in the least bit.

    "What am I to say to those who
    long to question my ideas of
    resting down just where he is?"

    Love the question tagged on here, this piece is so far mindblowing.

    "Uncertain
    as I may be, a wealth
    of courage blooms inside of
    me, and from his trunk to mine,
    I find perfection guides and guards
    our sweet catacombs of borrowed time."

    This was such a unique stanza, the vocabulary just hit me and caught my eye. Great imagery portrayed here.

    "Allow me
    to evaporate and swell
    into the skies, whose mouth
    opens wide at my swift replies;
    Climbing the tree of mysteries with
    nothing but a fistful of apple seeds."

    Wow, what an ending! I can say no more, this was so worthy of front page. I am glad you won, congrats! This was such a creative and unique write, I enjoyed each bit of it. Nicely done, keep writing for you have so much talent.

    God Bless You!

    ~MaryAnne

  • 8 years ago

    by Alvaro

    Omg... i've read many poems in this site... and only 2 have made me said omg... thanks for writing this piece... its inspired me to write, haha the last part... was what sealed it off for me... from the first word to the last...

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