It's Time To Be Afraid. [Finished!]

by x3 TinyDancer3000 x3   Jun 22, 2009


It's time to be afraid
I can sense your heart has started to race.
It's time to be afraid
This will be like a cat and mouse chase.

I'll be the cat, you can be the fragile little mouse.
I'll make you believe that you can escape
And when you least expect it
I'll crouch down and pounce.

As I stab you with a screwdriver into your calf,
My whole body shakes with a maniacal laugh.

You shriek from the pain and inch away from me
Thinking you can get away.
But as long as I'm here,
You will never be free.

I grab your leg and pull you towards me.
As your nails scratch the floor,
You yell "Please don't do this,
I can't take much more."

You plead for your life,
As you see that I grabbed a butcher's knife.

You say "You don't have to do this.
I won't tell anyone, not a soul
If you please, please let me go."

Oh but darling, you see I do
Because I get so excited by torturing you.

Tears start to well up in your eyes
As I run the sharp object
Lightly down your face,
Giving me sweet satisfaction
With no surprise.

I rip off your clothes and just when
I'm about to slit your throat,
You start to scream and shout.
Go ahead, my love, I assure you no one will hear,
You'll just wear yourself out.

With an evil grin,
I start to pierce your skin.

I count how many times I stab you.
After twenty-five, I realize
That you're no longer alive.
But just to be sure,
I stab you just a little bit more.

I drag your lifeless, bloody body
To a dumpster to throw you out.
Now that my job is done,
I walk away proud
Knowing that, yet again, this feline has won.

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  • 14 years ago

    by BreakEven

    A little violent, but I like it :) 5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by Hollow Emotion

    I liked it, the rhythem was a little shaky, but it worked well in it. The imagery was awesome... a little too awesome, not really the sight i wanted to see of a cat killing a mouse (but thats only cause i love animals and i would never want this to happen to any animal) but other than that, it was a great poem

  • 14 years ago

    by Cate Rock

    I grab your leg and pull you towards me.
    As your nails scratch the floor,
    You yell "Please don't do this anymore."

    Id reword it maybe like:

    I grab your leg and pull you towards me.
    As your nails scratch the floor,
    You yell "Please don't do this, I can't take much more."
    (But still a good start!)

    "Oh but darling, you see I do
    Because I get so excited by torturing you."
    -This must be the most "interesting line ive EVER heard. VERY NICE.

    "I rip off your clothes and just when
    I'm about to slit your throat,
    You start to scream and shout. ((should be shouting))
    Go ahead, my love, I assure you no one will hear,
    You'll just wear yourself out."

    "I drag your lifeless, bloody body
    To a dumpster to throw you out.
    Now that my job is done,
    I walk away proud
    Knowing that, yet again, this feline has won."
    ((PEEEERRRfect ending! couldn't have done it better myself<3 5/5 Excellent!

  • 14 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    My whole body shakes with a maniacal laugh.

    *This was the best line of the whole poem. I think you did an okay job with this poem. I think it could be better cratfed. Keep it up. Nik*

  • 14 years ago

    by Obscura

    Wow this is graphic needless to say the imagery is very good the rythem is a bit unsteady in places the structure is very good very well laid out within the poem

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