The flow is a bit rocky.
but other than that i think its good so far.
good job.
:D

I think u shud take out alot of thte "you should be afraid" it makes the poem unbalanced cause its only in the first stanza and it makes it boring to see the same line over and over again. Work a little on this poem and it will be great

I agree with Ashley...just take a few out... but i liked this one alot good imagery...right before the end feels like its missing a little bit of story but its good

I really like this poem...umm i like like the shrew driver part... usual people say knife...maybe a phillips shrew driver...lol

Lol great imagery keep writing!

I like it so far you do repeat the "you should be afraid" alot but i liked it and think its still a good flow after all poetry is in the beholders eye! =D cant wait to read the rest!

Wow it really changed from the first time I read it a lot more better different vocabulary flows smoothly it was beautiful and twisted I loved it just my type of poetry lovely job if I could id give it a 10/5 lol! Great job!

Wow this is graphic needless to say the imagery is very good the rythem is a bit unsteady in places the structure is very good very well laid out within the poem

My whole body shakes with a maniacal laugh.

*This was the best line of the whole poem. I think you did an okay job with this poem. I think it could be better cratfed. Keep it up. Nik*

I grab your leg and pull you towards me.
As your nails scratch the floor,
You yell "Please don't do this anymore."

Id reword it maybe like:

I grab your leg and pull you towards me.
As your nails scratch the floor,
You yell "Please don't do this, I can't take much more."
(But still a good start!)

"Oh but darling, you see I do
Because I get so excited by torturing you."
-This must be the most "interesting line ive EVER heard. VERY NICE.

"I rip off your clothes and just when
I'm about to slit your throat,
You start to scream and shout. ((should be shouting))
Go ahead, my love, I assure you no one will hear,
You'll just wear yourself out."

"I drag your lifeless, bloody body
To a dumpster to throw you out.
Now that my job is done,
I walk away proud
Knowing that, yet again, this feline has won."
((PEEEERRRfect ending! couldn't have done it better myself<3 5/5 Excellent!

I liked it, the rhythem was a little shaky, but it worked well in it. The imagery was awesome... a little too awesome, not really the sight i wanted to see of a cat killing a mouse (but thats only cause i love animals and i would never want this to happen to any animal) but other than that, it was a great poem

A little violent, but I like it :) 5/5