Comments : The Best Part Of Me

  • 8 years ago

    by Ingrid de Klerck

    Paul,

    This is so sweet and it rhymed and just flowed so well:)
    I am happy to know your little girl is doing well and her parents also.
    From your words I can see you spoke from the heart and you truly care for her and wish her all the best in life and I think that is really heart warming.
    I cannot single out just one stanza, for I loved them all equally. The part about her mum's dimples made me smile. Something tells me she changed your life for the good, just like my boy once did that for me. Through him I learned to love the world and I have this feeling the same goes for you:)

    A beautiful, touching and excellent poem, Paul. Welcome back:)

    *hugs*

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 8 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    "To my beautiful daughter,
    sweet love of my life,
    you opened my eyes,
    and showed me the light,"

    This is a touching opening, dedicated to someone who has changed your life. Excellent rhyme and flow here.

    "you're just so special to me,
    it is extremely simple,
    you're perfect in every way,
    plus you got moms dimples,"

    "moms" should be "mom's".

    Otherwise, this made me smile. Straight from your heart.

    "you'll grow up to be so beautiful,
    athletic, talented, funny and smart,
    theres no doubt in my mind,
    you'll be full of spirit and heart,"

    These are such sweet words to your daugther, I hope you and her have a relationship that will last forever.

    "you can be whatever you want,
    the possibility's don't end,
    ill support you through anything,
    ill be your best friend,"

    "ill" should be "I'll".

    Maybe add "always" after "I'll", in the last line.

    "i am right by your side,
    I'm not going anywhere,
    my shoulder is available,
    always for you my dear,"

    "i" should be "I".

    To know that she will always have somene to go to is a blessing.

    "if you ever need something,
    don't be afraid just ask,
    ill do everything i can,
    no matter how large the task,"

    "ill" should be "I'll".

    "i" should be "I".

    This stanza shows the determination you have to help her thought life and to be the best father you possibly can. Excellent work.

    "you have two great parents,
    there is nothing to fear,
    no matter what happens,
    we will always be here..."

    This last stanza is so touching. May God grant you peace and happiness forever.
    Take care and have a good day.

    ~MaryAnne

  • 8 years ago

    by Sourav

    Very free flowing poem. Seems a personal write. Very sweetly described. Well done!

  • 8 years ago

    by stubborngirl

    She is really lucky to have you, i dont know my father he left before i was born and i dont talk to my mother.. she is a very lucky girl.. this is a really good poem i love it, it shows a lot

  • 8 years ago

    by stubborngirl

    She is really lucky to have you, i dont know my father he left before i was born and i dont talk to my mother.. she is a very lucky girl.. this is a really good poem i love it, it shows a lot

  • 8 years ago

    by XxLastHopexX

    Wow...you must really love your daughter...it flows through your words...shes lucky to have you....keep writing...this was beautiful

  • 7 years ago

    by Bryan

    Great poem like how it flows out can definatley can tell you care for her keep them comin!