Although it may not be a poem, it was really strong. I give you props for writing and sharing it with the site. I'm very sorry for your loss. great write.

There were some grammatical mistakes and of course the flow wasnt perfect, but it was a good release of emotions and you did a good job letting us see them. You can tell this was a very personal poem to you; its never easy to write about two people who died and you were close to. I'm sorry to read about this :/ Take care.

That's so painful. Honestly, I feel this poem because I've lost many friends over the years, whether it be from death or just relationships falling out. For me, I guess you could it's a daily thing. It's obvious you really cared about these people. 5/5

This is a powerful poem i could feel the emotion pull me in as i read it the structure is very well laid out within the poem i like how you broke it into different events of the situation in each stanza like a flash back very clever

well done 5/5

I think this poem is very good. It is powerful and very emotional. It's something a lot of people can relate to. There is a lot of questioning of why they reached this fate, which I think gives the poem a hint of mystery. I think it is really good and it doesn't matter if it wasn't perfectly written because you wrote it for & about people.

I'm sorry. I would cry to. Life is a gift you need to hold on to.

Was sorry for your losses. Maybe as somebody said this was not meant to be a poem or was it why can't it be a poem it is a part of this life and you have put it on our site. Yes there are a lot of mistakes which you should correct out of respect for you lost love ones. I don't agree with this:-

And why does God have to punish us?

In this life God does not punish us, he does not have to we are great at doing that ourselves, that is the wonder of him we are free to do as we please and we pay the consequences if we over step those guidelines we know we should not be exceeded. God is there to look over us and love us, the knowing he is there is our boon. No God does not punish us we do, yet we have a reckoning to face one day that is what this life is our proving ground. From the moment we are born we start to mark his sheet and at its end our total will be counted.

Try to sort out your mistakes and I think this will be an excellent poem worthy of the remembrance of those lost friends Ray S 5/5

Wow, this really hit home, i just recently lost two freinds of mine in an accident, common occurence but ud never think it will happen to you. very good poem, its good you got that off your chest