I like the style in which you wrote this Si. Again you have wrote a poem that conveys its message simply yet eloquently.

I loved the format of the poem, it gave just the right emphasis to the message...The message is very easy to relate to. It is so easy to drift apart in life, sad but true! Excellent work.

I love the rhyme scheme here :) it was so good and new!
You did a great job Simon :) though you needed some metaphors.

Well done~

Well I'm glad i didn't let this poem drift by. I liked the flow you chose and the words you used. Like most of your works you have a gift of writing with a comfortable style that never rub the reader the wrong way. congrats on another good one!!

"Is there a correction?"

Yes....the line 'A trust I did a break' hardly makes sense due to the second article. I guess that was accidental.

Overall, it was a little dull and in a format i could never really care about. No imagery at all, dull choice of words and as a result, rather cliched.

I think it was a great poem