Comments : My Soul on Fire

  • 8 years ago

    by Finding myself

    This poem is so sad :(

    Goodbye my friend who left me here.
    I hope you don't shed a tear,
    for I am nothing but a soul
    whose flame is running out of coal.

    i liked this stanza alot. this one was the most powerful great job :)

  • 8 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    The pro of rhyming :] Well done! I enjoyed this write although it was sad, I thought the repetition was good, not overdone or annoying. Emotions were visible to the reader, so deep that I can imagine this person sitting in a corner writing this with tears in their eyes. Well done!

  • 8 years ago

    by Corruption

    I love this poem
    it is very sad
    and da rythming.... INCREDIBLE!!!!!

    "Let me see inside your soul
    and set fire to this black coal,
    so it may burn bright enough to see
    for even someone as blind as me."

    that stanza there spoke out to me
    it was beautiful

    i actually reread the poem twice after the first time
    i really liked it
    :D:D

    good job

    Keenan

  • 8 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    Reserve a place within your heart
    for me to get a running start.
    Don't leave me here limping behind
    as I try to rub away the blind.

    *I loved this stanza. My favorite ^.^ This was such a sad piece..but Damn you can rhyme Jen. *reaches inside your brain trying to steal your rhyming skills* Lol great work hun. I really enjoyed this. *claps for you* Nik*

  • 8 years ago

    by Sorefromreality

    Let me see inside your soul
    and set fire to this black coal,
    so it may burn bright enough to see
    for even someone as blind as me.

    Favorite stanza.

    I havent been on here for awhile, but I'm glad that one of the first poems I read when I got back on was this one.

  • 8 years ago

    by SolemnWish

    Let me see inside your soul
    and set fire to this black coal,
    so it may burn bright enough to see
    for even someone as blind as me.

    Favorite stanza.

    Amazing poem, amazing read, you have a lot of talent. Hope you don't mind if i keep track of your new poems ;)