Under Study

by Dark Savior   Jul 30, 2009


I'm sorry that you're no longer around
that it's bothered you so much blood turned brown

I'm sorry, but I don't know what you want me to say
I'm sorry that you no longer want to even say good day

I'm sorry that your no longer around when she's here
I'm sorry for always putting you second, even when you cheer

I'm sorry for so many things, so many unspokens
most of all i'm sorry I couldn't save you from choking.

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  • 8 years ago

    by Bradley Peter

    I just felt like this piece was missing something. Depth, perhaps. Or strength.

    (I don't mean this a an insult, by the way.)

    Brad

    P.S. Please comment and vote honestly on every poem you read.

  • 9 years ago

    by Nobodys Hero

    This is a very sad write, the repitition of the words 'im sorry' was used very well =]

    The flow was carried through nicely and the rhyming was very good. A short poem but one that held a lot of emotion and got the point across.

  • 9 years ago

    by just ashley

    This poem is so sad. the flow isreally good.

    I'm sorry for so many things, so many unspokens
    most of all i'm sorry I couldn't save you from choking.

    this is my favorite part even if its really sad. great job.