Comments : Razed! (Villanelle)

  • 14 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Some of these words I did not know the meaning of though I have heard them, my dad is right here so I just asked him!

    "The proliferation of your reputation -"

    This was such a well-worded line, the meaning grabbed me and had me wondering what was next.

    "Razed! Inconsistently delineating
    the relevance of poetic conversation."

    I really like that word "razed", I never have heard it before and it was uncommon in my mind. Mouris and you really write with such unique and fresh styles.

    "Decrypting your metaphorical representation,
    while embracing the knowledge, sedating
    the proliferation of your reputation."

    Beautiful, why hasn't anyone commented on this yet? I love how you make the reader think and ponder your words in each line, leaving them with something to think about.

    "Releasing freedom via an affirmation"

    Like "releasing freedom", that was vivid.

    And I how you used "via" in here.

    "should've happened - without discriminating
    the relevance of poetic conversation."

    Not sure I liked "should've", it just didn't fit with your other vocabulary.

    "A formation of equalization..."

    Very interesting line here.

    "folding under pressure, cremating
    the proliferation of your reputation."

    That first line was descriptive and was very clear.

    "Vividly distinct is the visualization;
    literally, metaphorically elucidating
    the relevance of poetic conversation."

    Wow, not sure if I understood all that, it seems so intense.

    "Releasing freedom via an affirmation,
    Razed! Inconsistently delineating
    the proliferation of your reputation -
    the relevance of poetic conversation."

    A brilliant poem, the form you used surely seemed challenging and it fit so well for your wording. 5/5 from me, this was a thoughtful write.

    ~MaryAnne