Comments : After The Rain ( Haiku)

  • 14 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Yes, first to comment!

    First off Ingrid, I just want to say this was beautifully written, and it was a joy to read a new poem by you. You are such a talented poet, never give that special gift up!

    "through a thousand prisms"

    Very unique line, this really caught my eye.

    "the sun shines abundantly"

    Although "the sun shines" is cliche in some ways, it wasn't here at all, the wording here was perfect.

    "on a world revived"

    The way you worded this line was different, orginal. This really summed this haiku up and just wowed the reader.

    5/5 from me, absolutely beautiful, keep stunning us with your work!

    Take care and God bless you, child of God!

    ~MaryAnne

  • 14 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    That is such a beautiful view of nature, the
    frehness after the rain as well as a sign of
    hope..liked it!

  • 14 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    I like the changes a lot better Ingrid, just altering a few words made this a stronger poem. Great work...

    ~MaryAnne

  • 14 years ago

    by Sylvia

    Somehow missed the first version. (smiles) A vivid image of the sun shining through a prism, millions of sparkling light rays. Well done.

  • 14 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    Very gorgeous image youve created for us to see. Beautifully written.

  • 14 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    Good imagery and word choice in this piece. This is a hrad form to appreciate since it is so short, but you did a nice job.

  • 14 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    Lovely imagery... I could see the sparkles here :D
    wonderfully penned ...

  • 14 years ago

    by John Long

    Imaginative,joyous, rejuvenating!

  • 14 years ago

    by mandy

    Wow. That was great, I don't know how you do it! Keep writting! 5/5

    mandy :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Amreen

    Beautiful and ecstatic..
    I get a vivid imagery here...
    Elegant write:)

  • 11 years ago

    by Robert Gardiner

    A Lovely Haiku Ingrid, Great Job!!!