The Ocean (String Haiku)

by Meena Krish   Aug 20, 2009


Under her blanket
discovery awaits of
long ago treasures

Many a story
and forgotten memories
slumber in darkness

She is majestic
a lovely woman in blue
with erratic moods

The way she dances
and her seducing physique
irresistible

Haiku is an unryhming form of Japanese poetry
with a syllable count of 5,7,5. Generally about
nature.

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  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    She is majestic
    a lovely woman in blue
    with erratic moods

    ^^^^^^^^

    Meena, what a wonderful stanza that is in a wonderful string haiku. I enjoyed this thoroughly. Well done on this clever write.
    All the very best
    Ben

  • 14 years ago

    by bhaskaryya

    The first three haiku are really pleasing though I feel the last one could have been better. English haiku doesn't need to be 5-7-5. It just needs to be be within 17 syllables, not necessarily 17. So that saves you from using a few filler words here and there! :)

  • 14 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Congrat Meena, a much deserved win:)

    *hugs*

    Ingrid

  • 14 years ago

    by Christopher Wry

    Yes that is Asherat and tis it not sad what we are doing to her.

  • 14 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    I can't add to what the girls said. It's just beautiful

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