Comments : Sara, My Friend

  • 14 years ago

    by Sylvia

    You are lucky to have a friend like Sara and I am sure she will be honored by this tribute to her friendship. I know I would be.

  • 14 years ago

    by bhaskaryya

    It was pretty hard for me to keep my interest sustained after coming across 'angelic silhouette' in the second line itself. I hate both the words with almost an equal passion. The reason being the same. I come across those words at least a thousand times a week while reading poetry on the net.
    And you have used an intimidating amount of adjectives through out this piece which makes it suffer all the more.
    "crisp pale blossomed flowerings" made me stumble over as many times as I tried to re-read it.

    'Tears from the sky' would be a cliched metaphor for rain even by the standards of a seven year old.

    First two stanzas you try to use metaphors to describe your friend and create some sort of an image. And then suddenly there is a sharp change in the tone and it gets all personal (something I care nothing about). It ends up losing the wider appeal it had started making.
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    I like your choice of words at times. And I'm sure you could string them together in much better fashion. This in itself was way too mediocre.

  • 14 years ago

    by Second to None

    I like the idea of this poem alot. but i think you need to spend more time thinking about the flow of the poem. :)

  • 14 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This is not the run of the mill poem. The imagery
    metaphors
    and style is nothing short of outstanding

  • 14 years ago

    by Cindy

    Joe
    What a beautiful loving tribute to your friend. This kind of friendship is rare. Treasure it and hold it close to your heart.
    Great job!
    Take Care
    Cindy

  • 14 years ago

    by Ray Smallshaw

    Joe you have painted with a flourish the importance of friendship your brush highlighting its needs and the love good friendship generates very flowery and with feeling I love it as any one who has had that special friend(S) knows the feeling of belonging as they make you feel special and expect nothing back.

    5/5 Ray S

  • 14 years ago

    by XxLastHopexX

    The formatting was different...but the content was really good...the flow and emotion was great