Comments : Lonely Night (Lento )

  • 14 years ago

    by Ingrid

    I kinda love the night, Meena!

    It can be scary though, I agree, when it storms and thunders...

    Beautiful poem and good job on the format:)

    *hugs*

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 14 years ago

    by Sylvia

    Night is a time of peace and solitude, never thought of it as being lonely. Well done.

  • 14 years ago

    by Cindy

    Meena
    Nights are very hard on some of us. That is the time lonliness comes to visit. Great job on your mixture of sad emotions mixed with nature.
    Excellent!
    Love Cindy

  • 14 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    Beautiful wording in this one. The words flow so well, loved 'cuddling stars' thats a great description. Awesome imagery :) Well done!

  • 14 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    Beautiful, your selection of words are just so lovely. Very few poets could paint such a powerful picture in mind with such few words.

    Awesome write

    all the best and take care

  • 14 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    The mornings are my favorite. Fresh air and quiet time. A time of awakening. Nights bother me, lonely or isolated is all I feel.
    A poem well done Meena as always

  • 14 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    "Pretty night she strolls the lonely sky"

    I felt to be the most effective, a comma should be placed after "pretty night". Just my opinion though.

    "cuddling stars her perpetual shiny friends"

    This is so peaceful and comforting, I would just suggest a comma after "stars".

    "city life cruelly ignores her slumber cry
    holding umbrella to guard tears that don�t end"

    Just delete that A thingy in the second line.

    I feel like "umbrella" should be plural or a "a" is needed before. Otherwise, beautiful job.

    "Alone she lives without a glimpse of sun"

    This is so sad but well-put.

    "storm she calls upon when she demands
    throne of darkness webs earth for evil fun
    thunderstorm whips life on her command"

    These ending lines were well-thought out and held much to understand fully her feelings.

    A unique treasure to come upon, thank you for sharing your words.

    God bless you and your family.

    ~MaryAnne