Nice poem, i like the flow, and the use of ribbons in here. Very well wirtten!! :)

5/5

First of all dont take any of my criticism badly. you are only 13 and i couldnt write a single word of poetry at your age so well done there. remember to stick at it and you will only get better with time.
i found no rythm in this poem nor a piticular rhyme scheme. and a poem needs one or the other atleast. so i wouldnt say this is a paticulirly good poem but keep trying. my first poems sucked also

They conceale and hide, like a present
all these cuts, that will never mend

^^loved the analogy that you have made with ribbons... how ribbons decorate hoding the flaws ... in this case its the hurt and sadness...

well penned...
keep writing...

Like rocky said, don't take my criticism badly, please.

I've been writing for a long time, like you, so I'll give you credit. You writing is good for your age.

I would suggest working on improving your rhythm and using more punctuation in your stanzas.

You topic is extremely cliche, lots of people have written about the same thing.

I can't tell you how many suicide or depression poems i've read, it's impossible. I'm not say you shouldn't write about this particular topic, I even have. I'm just saying that you should try to make your writing unique if you're going to write about an over-used topic. Be creative, surprise your audience.

Don't give up writing. Your foundation is good. Keep up the work and you'll be one of the best writers on this site in a few years.

I do not criticize. And i will not here.
Ive done the same thing, and felt really close to the same way if im understanding this. Not once have i ever heard a song or poem involve ribbons and self harm. Something that usually brings in happiness or reins in a special occasion meets a depressing topic such as self harm. ITs unique. And damn Rocky, you said it sucked!? Not only Harsh but just plain messed up.

As they said, I can't deny that I couldn't write such a poem at the young age of yours. Very suprise. I'm still a trainee in poem and I'm still practising on my rhyme and rythm so I won't touch the comment about this stuff. But I loved the way you use ribbon to express something as a symbol and its very symbolic. I personally a fan of symbolic user too. Besides I can feel the emotions and your symbol is quite strong. I like it! Not many people can write such level of poem at your age so Ima feel proud of you ^^ (cuz i'm one of 'em haha!) 5/5 hun!

Very well done. I love the verses and each says so much. The colors have a great anology in the poems. Rhyme is as well done very well. over all great job :D.

Love the whole ribbon theme. Great symbolism. Love the meaning and the flow. great job. talented.

victoria