I love this poem the rythem was so well timed wthin the poem the stucture was very well laid out too but the last two stanza's seem to not fit in to the rest

I gave you my heart damn it
you broke it so this is when I die.

i think you should change this to

"you broke my goddamn heart and now i slowly die"

i cant think of a other surgestion for the other one

but other than that

well done 5/5

Im not good in commenting.. But i really feel the sad, pain, hurts for every words you made. Its wonderful poem. And i like it so much.

I can definitely relate, great job! 5/5

Hey! Thanks so much for the comment on "I am the winter". If you could comment on more, I would love it. I can't do as thorough as a critique as you did, because this is longer, but I will do my best...

Does it burn just a little
to see the scars on my heart?
^Well..this just doesn't make sense to me. He can't see the scars on your heart. I think something relating to fire would be great. Tie along with burn..

I'd do whatever was possible
just to have you stay.
^Omit 'was'. It cuts off the flow.

But you choose
to cut me up and watch me sink
^Very unclear. Maybe "cut me up and watch me bleed"?

Fragile to death will
be my only excuse.
^I don't know what you're saying here. Sorry.

I wish I could hate you
but what would that do.
^Needs a question mark! =)

But know I see your true colors
save your apologies I don't want to hear it.
^know needs to be now. Oops!

I never wanted this to happen
but I really can't help but hate myself.
^This flows soooo well. Great job.

Overall, I liked it a lot. Just minor kinks!

Wow.sad wonderful poem.love u nik

How our fates surely change.. i know you dont want to hear from me.. and i dont blame you i broke your heart its what i deserve.. well this is and will be the last time i will ever bother you and or anyone.. so yeah.. im sorry but im gonna have to break my promise okay.. i just dont want to feel again so yeah.. ill end it all.. with one last flick of the wrist.. goodbye shanik.. forever..

I loved how it started off smooth then your emotions and feelings really started to kick in.
Its amazing how much we put into trusting people with our hearts and easily they break that trust.
it takes to long to build up but so quick to tear down.