Romantic, soft and beautiful images this verse made me see, MaryAnne..

slowly but surely you are turning into a woman now and it shows in your work.
I have this feeling your work will keep on gaining in dept and meaning as you proceed...It is so nice to be a witness to it:)

A perfect little gem you made.

Mistress Moon took us under her wings,
chanting of the kindling
between two zealous mortals
and how their ardent love
set the whole world on fire.

^^

This is indeed how love feels, especially when you are first starting to experience thes feelings, they can be so overwhelming to a young heart:)

God bless:)

5/5 Ingrid

I really thought this was written really well, the only problem or thing I disliked about it was the ending 'set the whole world on fire' Two peoples love setting the world onfire isnt as original as it used to be...maybe try something different here. Other than that, another great write. I can see youre expanding your vocabulary...good job!