Comments : Kid stuff

  • 8 years ago

    by Angie

    Melissa, I find this piece to be just precious... I just adore how you have worded this piece. It paints such a wondrous picture in my mind. Beautifully done.

  • 7 years ago

    by OHgreenman

    Melissa,
    Again, you have created a breathtaking piece filled with imagery.

    I noticed one small thing in your first stanza:

    how they attach themselves, like dewdrops
    to each stand
    in a rash attempt to grow a notion
    from mere breath and spittle

    Just one small mispelling...should read:

    how they attach themselves, like dewdrops
    to each STRAND
    in a rash attempt....

    Other than that, it's perfect!!

  • 7 years ago

    by Beautiful Chaos

    The title made me curious so I am glad that I stopped to read it. this was absolutely wonderful, I don't think I can offer any beneficial critique because I found nothing wrong with it. Your word choice was spot on and I love the way the title actually fits into the whole piece. An excellent job, indeed worthy of nomination, good luck.

  • 7 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    Good play on words. Excellent imagery. This piece is clever and unique. Great job!

  • 7 years ago

    by bhaskaryya

    One of the best I have read on this site.... Good work!

  • 7 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    Congrats on the win.. very well deserved. Great imagery that drew the reader in and didnt let them stop reading. Interesting and unique write from you, well done. :]

  • 7 years ago

    by Corinne

    Congratulations Melissa. A wonderful piece, as is all your work!

  • 7 years ago

    by Angie

    Congrats on the WIN Melissa!! This write so deserves it and so do you, way to go!!