Comments : I am from

  • 14 years ago

    by Miss Teach

    Very nice, i liked how you alluded to the south without ever really mentioning it until the last stanzas.

  • 14 years ago

    by Sylvia

    Kay, what a delight. Made me homesick. (smiles)

  • 14 years ago

    by Corinne

    Kay this is so funny and so well done! A great piece and most worthy of a 5 - or more!
    :-D

  • 14 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    Lovely description of your place... it makes me go there and feel and watch all the things you have mentioned...

    I am from Georgia
    Red clay and Kudzu
    Where we still say "yes ma'am"
    "please" and "thank you"

    loved these lines... it just shows how much respect you have for your place... pointing out the positive facts about your city...

    beautiful write :)

  • 14 years ago

    by Twisted Heart

    Sweet Kay,
    This is sooooo you... Very Clever as Anna said. Loved the whole thing. Word choices and such wonderful descriptions. Well done, my friend.

    Jeannie

  • 14 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    A warm description about your hometown
    where respect & good manvers still survivies..liked the read :)

  • 14 years ago

    by Sungrl And Mrs Whatsit

    I am loving this..every line...
    gonna sen' it to mah sista in Georgia..
    Yes please and thank you ma'am..
    Thanks for this genuine treat.

  • 14 years ago

    by Liz

    That was beautiful. i always wanted to write about my place but i can't find any positives. i forgot what its like to hear "please and thank you" lol

    great write, 5/5

    love always
    Liz

  • 14 years ago

    by Christopher Wry

    Love this one. You done did good.

  • 14 years ago

    by eezebard

    It's good to know where we come from and helps to guide us where we're heading ... enjoyed this lighthearted read
    :o)
    Rex

  • 13 years ago

    by Anthony M

    Refreshing read, the rhyming wasn't overdone and each stanza read very easily. Enjoyed the playful theme too. Nice writing.

  • 13 years ago

    by E <3

    Getting a few things out of the way before I get started: "occasional" not " occassional", and "universities" not "universites".
    I am from Y'all and Yonder
    every day of the week,
    To fixin' and "y'ont to"
    and occassional "I'll be's"
    ^^^ I'm liking the way you started off. It gives me some background on you, language wise.

    I am from the land of
    peanuts and peaches,
    Where pecans and pines cover
    plantation reaches
    ^^^ I'm not sure if you intentionally added the rhyming in lines 2 and 4 of this stanza, but it worked. I like the imagery you portrayed with this stanza, it left a warm image fresh in my mind.

    I am from grits and gravy
    "gonna" and "gwine",
    The Guido Gardens
    and homemade wine
    ^^^ I like how you made this stanza relate to another. Meaning it would fit under the category of food and drink, you don't just bounce from place to place.

    I am from catfish, catheads
    and cracklin cornbread
    Chicken and Chops to
    being born and bred
    ^^^ The alliteration you used here was very good, (I believe it's an alliteration) with "Catfish, catheads and cracklin cornbread." They all make that k sound. It really makes the poem much more interesting when you add in rhetorical devices like that. It really flowed with the piece, and fit in nicely.

    I am from "Merry Christmas"
    and "How's your momma an nem"
    singing "Will the circle be unbroken"
    and other gospel hymns
    ^^^ I'm enjoying this stanza. It gives us insight on what things you usually do in your family, and that's always nice to see.

    I am from the banks of Juliette
    the shores of Jekyll Isle
    Red dirt roads, Kaolin
    and drivin a country mile
    ^^^ Ahhhhhhh. Making the setting, I love it when poems do that. Unfortunately, I don't know where those places are, but I'm probably going to look it up to get an idea.

    I am from trotlines and trolleys,
    universites and techs
    From the "International city"
    and a game for rednecks
    ^^^ This stanza, to me shows how technology is taking a play in your life. You see all the grammar mistakes throughout the poem, and you are the educated one. It's like coming of age, or maybe just the times when you and your family grew up are different.

    I am from dirt track races,
    huntin' fishin' and mud
    From the center of it all
    in the ninety four flood

    ^^^ I'm trying to save all my good comments for the end. Lol. I really like how you seem to reserve a stanza for different important parts of your life who make you who you are. I think it's really important to the poem, and it truly explains who you are, and makes the poem great. Sorry if I'm being redundant, I'm having a hard time trying to get my thoughts on... Uh. Microsoft Word. lol

    I am from Georgia
    Red clay and Kudzu
    Where we still say "yes ma'am"
    "please" and "thank you"
    ^^^ This was a nice way to sum things up. Saying where you geographically live, and the last two lines I really liked for some reason, can't really explain it, but I just did.

    I really like all the language things you put it. I think it really gave to poem an edge. In my opinion, it also allows the reader, no matter where they are from to understand where you are coming from, because maybe someone is from a different place and they don't understand like some of us who live in the U.S. do. (Not trying to be offensive to anyone if you're not from the U.S.)

    I LOVE LOVE LOVE how you pieced everything together, food, setting, language, hobbies, and more, it was really really great. There was always something different that was in the poem, and it just went together great. I also like the format, how you were consistent with writing 4 lined stanzas.
    5/5
    Keep writing,
    Erna