Comments : Downpour of Daydreams.

  • 7 years ago

    by Sylvia

    A downpour of daydreams, dancing, twirling among them, so vivid. The last verse to me is full of hope and promise. Well done.

  • 7 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    A well written hope-filled poem that uniquely displayed inspiration and the message you wanted to get across to your readers. Very uplifting, thanks for that smile Temps!

    Good luck with all you are busy with, I am sorry for commenting so late on your new poems!

    5/5 from me, a promising piece that is needed int today's world.

    God bless you!

    ~MaryAnne

  • 7 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    A downpour of daydreams
    bursted from broken seams

    I like this image of daydreams raining. This is a very good opening that draws the
    reader into your poem.

    of a courageous idealist,
    drizzling memories;
    compressing them
    against my skin

    Another part that I like. It feels like a passionate bond between dreams & the person...very good!

  • 7 years ago

    by Ingrid de Klerck

    This went from sad to cheeerful in the most amazing way....indeed we should never give up hope..it is the one thing that keep us strong.

    Lovely poem, Temps:)

    God bless,

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 7 years ago

    by Dreamofolwin

    A beautiful write :) Our daydreams do indeed twist, twirl, dance and light up our mind/days! Loved this! Well done :)

  • 7 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    A downpour of daydreams
    bursted from broken seams
    of a courageous idealist,

    ^^ the starting captured me... the analogy with rain is superb... so beautifully penned...

    to forget this vacancy
    in my heart, carved
    by acidic goodbyes-

    ^^ that was touching... goodbyes are never happy but some can leave a scar in our heart... the last line is brilliant...

    spectrum of colors; blooming
    rainbows and smiling stars
    sewn by threads of promise.

    ^^ another verse with splendid imagery... hopeful and beautiful... lovely lines...

    brilliant poem :)

  • 7 years ago

    by Tom Swart

    Very nicely done and well penned with perfect words to display your emotion. keep up the nice writes. peace

  • 7 years ago

    by damont

    The title is unique your actually very good writer i like your poetry. lovely i mean where do you come up with this stuff lolz. keep writing 5/5

  • 7 years ago

    by Nobodys Hero

    A very enjoyable and beautiful piece youv'e wriiten here =]

    The tittle of the piece attracted me immediatly to this poem and I wasnt dissapointed, excellent job!

  • 7 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    You've done it again. I feel another winner here Temps. Very lovely word choice, the imagery is great as well. I love your title too. It's pefect. Another flawless piece from that brillant mind of yours :) Nik

  • 7 years ago

    by Ingrid de Klerck

    Well deserved win Temps, congrats!

    Ingrid

  • 7 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    Congrats hun :) I told you this was a winner.

  • 7 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    Congrats cookie dough :-)

  • 7 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Wow, Temps congratulations! You are going so far with your poetry and it just is so nice to see that blossom. Good job, I hope you are enjoying your week.

    ~MaryAnne

  • 7 years ago

    by Dixiedaisy

    Congratulations on a well deserved win.

  • 7 years ago

    by Cindy

    Congrats Temps :) Great job on this piece.
    Love Cindy

  • 7 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    Great selection of words and a powerful write. Congratulations on your win, much deserved one.

    Really liked this stanza

    Dancing in their beauty;
    twisting, twirling,wanting
    to forget this vacancy
    in my heart, carved
    by acidic goodbyes.

    Great write indeed

    all the best and take care

  • 7 years ago

    by Fran

    Gorgous fluid imagery, well done.

  • 7 years ago

    by Countess of Monte Cristo

    What a lovely write. I apologize for the late commenting, but i'm glad to have read this. Rainbows, downpour, dreams, u use all these metaphors which makes this poem a haven for the reader's imagination.

    5/5

  • 7 years ago

    by FindingHarmonyInYurCries

    I love it!!
    It's perfect.
    Has true purpose and heart.

    5/5