Hmmmm what a very powerful, intelligent, profound, and meaningful poem!, i never thought you could do such poem, this showed your improvement in poetry., gosh, it's not a love poem but i could fall in love with you at this time :)

A deep poem i will admit, I love your entrance probably moments in most peoples lives where they feel like this and your appeal was great.

I think this is the best poem you have so far...I read some of yours and i can see the improvements in your writing skills....Thru this piece, you were able to convey the emotion freely...However i noticed some punctuations that were out of place. Keep writing..:-)

Such an intelligent and intriguing write. Beautfiul yet sed. Well done, 5/5. Em

A really great poem that would have been superb if the poor grammar and poetic licence was not present. I find the use of PL annoying and it spoils good poetry, leave it with those unsure established poets who do it for those who know no better.
Funny how we think a bed can protect us from the bad out of it and the poem caught that message and the sadness of loss brilliantly.
5/5 Ray S

I really loved how you started it off, it really kind of hooked me haha.
IT was a wonderful piece, sad, but amazing
5/5
- Cris

I don't know if it is part of your poem or not (I's) that aren't capitalized bug me. If however it has been done on purpose than I understand.

Also the substitution of an (o) for a (0) was a tad confusing as well.

anyway I liked your poem and I thank you for the read.

But remember
'You don't write because you want to say something, you write because you've got something to say.'F Scott Fitzgerald

thanks for the read
>-Spirit->

This poem was very well written and it flowed really nicely, too. I think you did a really great job on writing it. You expressed yourself very well. 5/5

~Kristina

I really liked the opening but the end is what intrigued me the moon and stars lighting your path it kinda makes me wish it went on further but it was great and really powerful and expressive 5/5

I loved this poem.. You describe that indescribable feeling of loneliness and the old memories that we shield ourselves in when we do feel lonely. I would never wish being alone on another person.. great job though- kayla

Hmmmm... first of yours that I've read, and I must say, I'm both impressed and intrigued. This was a very good write. It was strong in feeling, gentile in it's obscurity, and drew out some interesting imagery. All in all, and that's besides the few errors in grammer, I though it was an extemely good piece. Keep writing, and I'm sure your talent will grow, and grow, and grow.