It's so heart breaking when someone is so determined to take their own life, and refuse any help to pull them from that abyss. You have captured this so poignantly here. I unfortunately was there when someone commited suicide when I was in college. I will never forget that sad moment.
This was full of suspense not only because of how this was written but the format of it as well. A very powerful poem full of emotion. I really enjoyed this, it was something different full of imagery and well worth the read. (: Well done!