Ingrid, this is beautiful. You have used the terms "thine" and "thee" perfectly, without sounding trite or forced. A wonderful love poem. - And thank you for your words regarding my mother. I appreciate them very much.
Oh my goodness I wish I could write this way! Using thine, and thee, and thou is really hard for me. Its an older way of speaking, but i absolutely love reading it! At least one of us can make some great poetry out of it :)
beautifully written, Loved the title! It really drew me in!
This is a lovely poem. This surprises me because I am not normally a fan of the archaic-sounding poems written today. Even though I'm not sure "hand of thee" is correct, this piece doesn't read like it was written today. Its style belongs right in the classical world that doesn't date. I think the secret is that you have achieved a lovely and rhythmic meter that is spot on in this poem. Also, your subject of love here is simple and sweet, which really suits the style and length.
My mother can't sing to save her life, but she always recites poetry to herself as she works. (Good meter is essential for this.) Your poem is exactly the kind of thing she loves and I, in turn, love it too.