Comments : Linger.

  • 7 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    I know the feeling all too well--that one person lingering and just doesn't go away. The hurt that goes along with it is overwhelming-loved your way of describing that, giving the arousing aroma personification by saying it had devilish hooks. Well done Bliss.

  • 7 years ago

    by The Queen

    This was delicately worded and measured..And i could feel the lingering pain althroughout the poem..Well done...

  • 7 years ago

    by Kurt

    This poem looks like it took an excruciating amount of time to finish. The way it is put together really aids the reader in feeling the lingering pain.

    "Perhaps your presence
    shadows my every move
    for I wish to cling to faith
    a moment longer, in hopes
    it does not betray my trust."

    This stanza blew my mind. The imagery created by the first two lines followed up with the impact and power of the third line almost left me breathless. Truly splendid work. 5/5.

  • 7 years ago

    by Knee

    AMAZING!
    I absolutely love is Bliss! (: especially your ending, it's always amazing to end the poem beautifully, strengthens it more and more.

    "Perhaps your presence
    shadows my every move
    for I wish to cling to faith
    a moment longer, in hopes
    it does not betray my trust."
    ^
    I loved this stanza :) great imagery!

    I really liked your almost-repetitive lines, with the word linger, totally descriptive!
    Very well done sweetie. I really really missed your poems, I'm so glad you're back on the lane.
    Write on~

  • 7 years ago

    by Ingrid de Klerck

    Well deserving of a win Bliss, congrats!

    I did not get a chance to read this piece until now, but I am glad I did.

    And your haunting scent
    invades my essence
    for I am not ready,
    to release

    Linger...
    and we'll intertwine
    in my dreams.

    ^^

    Letting go can indeed be very hard, you captured this sentiment very well within this verse.

    God bless,

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 7 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    YAAAY! congrats Bliss :] well deserved, keep writing :]

  • 7 years ago

    by Cindy

    Congrats on your win :)

  • 7 years ago

    by Knee

    Congraaatss sweetie!! yaaay I'm soo happy for you! :)
    This is a beautiful well-deserving poem.

  • 7 years ago

    by Mr Rhee

    Very fine wording. I loved this poem. It was so strong in feeling and memories. Well done.

  • 7 years ago

    by RetroRavey

    Lovely

    ~R

  • 7 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Wow.... This poems is beautiful and you realllly deserve the win! Congratulations!! I loooove ittt... you've expressed really deep emotions... I love the repetition of "...you linger" .. It makes it more emotional and powerful. Wonderful job dear!

  • 7 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Wow.... This poems is beautiful and you realllly deserve the win! Congratulations!! I loooove ittt... you've expressed really deep emotions... I love the repetition of "...you linger" .. It makes it more emotional and powerful. Wonderful job dear!

  • 7 years ago

    by Em

    I know exactly how you feel when somebody you once loved or love still lingers around you even when you dont want them to because they can't take no for an answer. Very mysterious but beautiful write, 5/5. Em

  • 6 years ago

    by mossgirl19

    Hey this one's really sweet...i can relate to this very much...

  • Incredible portrayal of how it feels to remember lost love. incredible flow the words seem to spill out always leading back to that emotion that always lingers in the deepest pits of our mind. 5/5

  • 6 years ago

    by mohamad aref numan

    Nice one

  • 6 years ago

    by Innocent Fairy

    Wow... I absolutely loved it and everything ... Some many thoughts... we'll just stick with I loved it :) 5/5 but deserves way more stars :) :)

  • 6 years ago

    by Dave

    Wow that was great, i can see how this won, congrats

  • 6 years ago

    by yogi73

    Good stuff...got any more?

  • 5 years ago

    by A lonely soul

    Perhaps one well deserving of the win. The poem has deep sentimental value, it seems. The best stanza for me was:

    Those enticing eyes
    once girdled a fairytale
    with no ending in scene.
    Now stitched in torment
    carved by a lover's allure.
    Reminiscence of yesterday

    ...yet you linger.

    A very relatable one indeed. Still haunts me today.