'the sun crumbled
with each drop of rain.'
^These lines blew me away, I have never heard of this expression used but I must say I adore it. Obviously when it rains, the sunshine goes away, what a unique way of describing this--the sun crumbling. You couldnt have described it any better!
'hearts can hang from the moon
yet, never see the stars.'
^Another very powerful, & original lines. Left me speechless & in deep thought.
Wow...you sure dont leave the reader with many words after reading this spectacular piece. I again apologize for not noticing this sooner, very very deserving. :]