Rising Young Star (Retourne)

by Meena Krish   Nov 17, 2009


My young man with a heart of gold
blessed we feel to have you with us
in your fresh smile I am content
a rising young star in my world

Blessed we feel to have you with us
for you make each day rewarding,
moments of us sown in my heart
is been safely kept from the start

In your fresh smile I am content
goals you achieve fill me with pride,
dreams you build I pray you will see
your helping hand I'll always be

A rising young star in my world
whom I can always kiss and hold,
may God bless you with wealth of joy
happy birthday my handsome boy

A Retourne is a French poetry form wherein repetition is used, employed. It consist of four quatrains (four-line stanzas), with each line having eight syllables. The trick though is, that the first stanza's second line must also be the second stanza's first line, the first stanza's third line is the third stanza's first, and the first stanza's fourth line is the fourth stanza's first. Retournes can but do not have to rhyme.

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  • 14 years ago

    by Cindy

    Meena
    What a wonderful tribute to your son. Our children bring us the greatest joy in life.
    Great job!
    Love Cindy

  • 14 years ago

    by Robert Gardiner

    Very Nicely Done Meena, Emjoyed!!!

  • 14 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    Very creative piece hun :) I enjoyed reading this. Lovely imagery and diction. Flows wonderfully as well. Nik

  • 14 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Wish him a good year from me too, Meena:)

    With a mama like you, he cannot lose.

    Good job on the Retourne as well, flawless and a joy to read, also due to the subject:)

    God bless,

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 14 years ago

    by Sylvia

    Meena, sounds as if one of your sons had a birthday. Very nice poem about that.