The descriptions is amazing here, i love "intricate design". i also love the line "cherished times with enchanted wines" it makes me think of old story books.

When I read something original it always give me a thrill so when I started on your trilogy of Alison I found it was like a fascinating blossoming love story, in the beginning, the dawning and the after glow.
You as a poet are new to me and in the first part I ate up your words, chocolate like hair, Rappling through mazes of dark light so imaginative, and so image building as all excellent poetry, and refreshing in its newness.
The last two lines were my favourite and so right to end it. I wonder were your finale came from, You'll be my valentine tonight intriguing.
My favourite of the three parts was the second part amazing and descriptive full of insight and the wonder of love in its full glory with you besotted by your subject. I truly enjoyed it from start to finish and wonder if it was easy as love helps when your mind opens to it.
Your final verse, the wonder comes out of what you have and perhaps a fear of loosing? words like Eclaircise my anxiety & illuminate my growth, love can do strange things to you, its last line the seal and so appropriate.
One of the best poetry strings I have read in a long time and worth an excellent 5/5 for every part of it. You have won me over and I can't wait to read the rest of your work. Thanks Ray S

The last two lines were my favorite as well :) great job! it was a beautiful love story!

Great poem! I have but one critique regarding this line
Lavish dark chocolate like hair
I think you might see it serves your poem well if you changed the word like. Maybe toned? or something i had to read that line like 3 times to see you weren't using a simile lol
Otherwise the flow is impeccable the word choice of adjectives are spectacular. The rhyme is a little forced at some points but otherwise superbly written. The imagery is the best of all it takes you on a journey and doesn't leave you unsatisfied

Very professional. This is a poem that really makes you think, and it's also very beautiful. I couldn't help but read it several times. The words you used go wonderfully with this type of poem, and really makes it stick out. You're very talented. 5/5

Yes, this was very original. I think that your choice of vocabulary was brilliant. It is what made this piece truly beautiful. I haven't read a poem like this in a long while. Can't wait to read Part 2 and 3. This most definately deserves a 5/5.

--KayJay

This poem has a great rhyme scheme and word choice

"Such cerise skin it is only but Fair"
is an interesting phrase even if it is colloquial I'm
sure it is in the realm of poetic license and I did enjoy the whole part 1 poem with its romantic imagery

Great flow, great description it was almost like I was looking at a picture of her. Excellent imagery with this 5/5

Oh My!!! This was amazing. You can ask anyone on this site I am the biggest sucker form some good diction and this piece is just pouring with slendid word choice. I love the way each line flows into the next and how deep your emotions are. Very nice piece :) Nik

I love the reference to Venus & using the poem with Valentine. That's pretty powerful stuff. Keep up the good work.

First I would like to comment that it was very clever to write an acoustic with her name.

"A mystical soul with intricate design,
Lavish dark chocolate toned hair,
Intelligent with a touch of arrogance,
Such cerise skin it is only but Fair.
Obstacles will avoid this beauty belle,
Near Venus She'll never tell."

First line: You automatically caught the reader into your description of this person and used grabbing but not over-used words.

Second line: This was a very poetic way to describe her hair, it gave me the images right away.

Third line: I liked the truth in this, how you portray her true-self, it creates a better understanding for your readers.

Fourth line: "cerise" I did have to look up online, because I am not familiar with the word, but once I did, it fit perfectly here.

Fifth line: When I read this line aloud, it flowed so smoothly on my tongue, nothing was forced and this whole stanza the flow is consistant.

Sixth: A thoughtful concept, this was a brilliant line.

"Cherished times with enchanted wines,
Affective in the eyes of love & lust,
Rappling through mazes of dark light,
Emerging maturity, Apex of Trust
You'll be my valentine tonight."

First line: Do not change a word in this line, I read this over and over again and it sounded perfect!

Second line: Good feelings availabe here.

Third line: Nice usage of "rappling", I am really into this poem more so than ever.

Fourth line: Loved how you worded this, it just started to sum up your lovely words.

Last line: I think this was a good statement to end on, after giving all of your views on her and describing her likes to the world, you say the one message for your heart you wish to send to her.

Beautiful work, I am sorry I do not have any suggestions, but you show an eminent talent for writing, never give that up.

God bless you!

~MA

This was a very beautiful poem, the wording was excellently chosen. Its a very powerful poem, image filled poem, I especially love the wording in this verse:

"Lavish dark chocolate toned hair,
Intelligent with a touch of arrogance,"

This is so sweet. It's like telling of your love life with your lover.