Comments : Butterflies

  • 14 years ago

    by morgan

    It is a good poem. i liked what you were trying to say. it was good, but i have two critiques on it. one, in my opinion it did not flow very well, so i would reread it and see if you could improve the fluidity in it because it is kind of choppy in some parts. two, i would watch the rhyme skeam in it.

    if you were going for a free style, no rhyme skeam then it was extreamly good.

    i am sorry that i was so hard on you poem. i was just trying to help you. i cant wait till i see another one of your poems.

    Morgan :):):):):):):):)