Good job to you and Mel on the song title contest. Very creative and good images within the words. Well done.

How very beautiful this poem is ladies....it sings of the joys of love and all that comes with it.

I particulary liked this part:

Under a construction paper moon, silk jasmine bloom,
stimulating the sweet scent of surrender

^^
I think these words are very, very poetical:)

Good work, I went all dreamy reading it.

God bless and a hug,

5/5 Ingrid

Each verse is penned with warm and lovely
images..the two of you did an excellent job!
Well done :)

In my field of paper flowers and candy clouds of lullaby

*If you've never heard this song you really need too. That is my favorite line and I knew you two would do wonders with it. I love that it was first because it really adds to the following lines. Wonderful*

dipped in raspberry devotion sprinkled with affinity.

*Loved it...loved..this is my third time reading this poem and I still love this line. Such a clever one and the imagry just knocks me out. Wow :) *

Tantalize all sights with soft, flickering hues.

*Another favorite line. This poem had so many great ideas. One thing that threw me off a little was the way it was written. I didn't like the way the syntaz was..it was just weird to me and too long in places. But that could just be me lol. Anywho I was very proud of you two, you defeated my contest and made such a lovely piece. Nice work ladies :) Nik*

If ever there is anything that I love, its vivid imagery that connects you to the reality of the emotion in the words

This poem alone provokes me to add you to my list,this is how I would love to write

Thank you

A Very Lovey poem Kelleyanna, Wonderul Job. Nice to run into you again. How have you been?

This is really interesting has great imagery and a great flow i really enjoyed reading it well done!

I rarely give out 5/5 - I am extremely impressed with the command of English, the flow and the uniqueness of this, quite enchanting!