Comments : Bereft Of Your Love.

  • 7 years ago

    by Cindy

    Temps
    What a very sad piece you have penned. This brings so much sadness to my heart.

    here with me in my dreams-
    nearly every night it seems.
    intensifying lingering feelings--
    broken puzzle pieces
    void of meaning.

    It is so painful to lose a love. To death or by other means. When you love someone that intensely. The pain does linger.
    Great job!
    Love Cindy

  • 7 years ago

    by Sylvia

    A love being gone from our lives no matter why they are gone, does give us sad memories but we must put them in their place and move on. Well done.

  • 7 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    Such a touching yet beautiful write

    //I'm left clinging to reflections
    of past's imperfections.
    // loved these line... reflections is wonderfully used here...

    keep writing :)

  • 7 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    Impossible it is to bereave
    a love I once believed.
    I'm left clinging to reflections
    of past's imperfections.
    without you by my side-
    diamonds start to fall
    from these eyes.

    This stanza is beautifully crafted.."left clinging to reflection of past's imperfection" &
    the image of diamonds falling from the eyes..
    a beautifully sad..take care.

  • 7 years ago

    by Ingrid de Klerck

    Though the theme is the same, I see you grow in these verses, Temps.

    With the passing of time your words have become more intense and the emotions portrayed are very clearly rendered.

    words from your lips no longer depart-
    regardless though;
    you're in my heart

    ^^
    When you have loved with all your heart, it cannot be undone and that certain person has a place in your heart eternally. I know, because I am the same when it comes to love. Be glad you are not the kind to use people as disposables, this seems to be ther trend nowadays and it makes me feel a so sad. This verse is a clear sign of a good heart, very well done, girl:)

    God bless,

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 7 years ago

    by Jad

    Temps this was written nicely but the meaning behind it is so sad and you get that expressed with your words very clearly. So many people have loved ones die or breakup or whatever else may had happen and this describes the feeling perfectly. Good job.

  • 7 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    You're right we did write the same piece almost lol. I think I liked yours more. I loved the diction and the way you express your pain here. It's something I can relate to very well and I feel you did a great job explaining what it's like to really lose someone you've loved so much and how their presence lingers even after they've gone. A very sad feeling. Great work dear :] Nik

  • 7 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Temps, I absolutely loved the flow and ease of this piece and how it read such a sad expression right into my face. I felt the meaning to be profoundly strong here especially, and your words need not be fancy or impressive but, rang true, as painful as that may be.

    Wonderfully written, enjoy your Spring!

    ~MaryAnne

  • 7 years ago

    by Intoxic8dBeautyxXHaNaXx

    I really liked this line, may I borrow it? Credits would go to you. :3

    impossible it is to bereave
    a love I once believed.
    I'm left clinging to reflections
    of past's imperfections.
    without you by my side-
    diamonds start to fall
    from these eyes.

  • 7 years ago

    by Faithless

    Wow I'm really taken away after reading this. I love how you craft this masterpiece. I love you you used diamonds as a metaphor for the tears that fall off your eyes. Excellent work

  • 7 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Wooow... this poem is so beautiful that it swept me away! I looooved every word! I can really relate to the emotions you've expressed in this poem and maybe that's why I feel so attached to it... Wonderful job!

  • 7 years ago

    by Yakari Gabriel

    I'm left clinging to reflections
    of past's imperfections.
    ^
    And Just maybe
    I promise to never love again
    until i read this piece
    SO BEAUTIFUL
    I mean really really well done (: