Though the theme is the same, I see you grow in these verses, Temps.
With the passing of time your words have become more intense and the emotions portrayed are very clearly rendered.
words from your lips no longer depart-
you're in my heart
When you have loved with all your heart, it cannot be undone and that certain person has a place in your heart eternally. I know, because I am the same when it comes to love. Be glad you are not the kind to use people as disposables, this seems to be ther trend nowadays and it makes me feel a so sad. This verse is a clear sign of a good heart, very well done, girl:)
Temps this was written nicely but the meaning behind it is so sad and you get that expressed with your words very clearly. So many people have loved ones die or breakup or whatever else may had happen and this describes the feeling perfectly. Good job.
You're right we did write the same piece almost lol. I think I liked yours more. I loved the diction and the way you express your pain here. It's something I can relate to very well and I feel you did a great job explaining what it's like to really lose someone you've loved so much and how their presence lingers even after they've gone. A very sad feeling. Great work dear :] Nik
Temps, I absolutely loved the flow and ease of this piece and how it read such a sad expression right into my face. I felt the meaning to be profoundly strong here especially, and your words need not be fancy or impressive but, rang true, as painful as that may be.
Wooow... this poem is so beautiful that it swept me away! I looooved every word! I can really relate to the emotions you've expressed in this poem and maybe that's why I feel so attached to it... Wonderful job!