Comments : Sadness. [Apostrophe]

  • 7 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    I have never heard of this form either but it was very interesting to read about and I'm glad you enjoyed writing this. I liked the thought put into this, the pleading of your soul ran on, and especially the last two lines hit that right note for an ending. This person had taken the sunshine with them and your smile, all you wanted was it back, and for them to leave, for good.

    A well-expressed portrayal of how you want to be left free, unbothered by this presence that haunts over you, it was something different to read from you, and made me wonder who this was, which sparked my imagination.

    God bless you and thanks for the read.

    ~MaryAnne

  • 7 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    I heard about this in a class I took last year, but we learned about it in a different so it was cool to see it used this way. I like this piece but their were parts I felt could have been changed. Some words I've seen in your other pieces that would have been nice to see changed. But I did enjoy the piece as a whole as well as the whole idea of saddness as a person. Clever idea. Nice work. Nik :]

  • 7 years ago

    by Sylvia

    I too had not heard of this form but you did a good job with it. Always like to learn something new. You gave a voice to sadness. If only the form allowed Sadness to answer you. Well done.

  • 7 years ago

    by Cindy

    Temps
    Very interesting form. Sometimes we feel that our happiness has been taken. Hope yours returns soon.
    Love Cindy

  • 7 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    Indeed an interesting form! Have not heard of
    it though and it sounds very real like, asking
    sorrow as if it was a person to leave you. I
    really liked it..take care.