Grabs And Slays (Triquint)

by Meena Krish   May 4, 2010


Smile is a short walk before it strays
losing bits of joy each day,
sadness grabs and slays
it always
pains.

With mistakes and tears frustration plays
for quiet moments peace prays,
sadness grabs and slays
it always
rains.

Pillow hears night tales which comes to lay
dried out heartaches dawn displays,
sadness grabs and slays
it always
stains.

Triquint poem created by Sylvia. A. Feeley consists of 3
verses with 5 lines each. Lines 3 and 4 of verse one is
repeated in verse two and three. Syllable count for each
stanza: 9,7,5,3,1 and the rhyme scheme is aaAAb.

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  • 13 years ago

    by Once an Angel

    This was an incredible poem. Not only did you stick to a difficult form, but you gave the poem life and soul and meaning beyond the form. This poem used elequence, something that is becoming less and less common in our world of pop music artists. Thank you for such a refreshing poem. It was so beautiful that it hurt.

  • 13 years ago

    by Anthony M

    I envy those that can write within a strict form including syllable counts, I just don't have the patience myself and feel too constrained. Well penned piece that forces the reader to understand the way in which it was intended to be read; can't be rushed, pauses for effect and thought.

  • 13 years ago

    by paige

    Gorgeous poem x

  • 13 years ago

    by Faithless

    Interesting format. I think you did a pretty good job in using the format to compliment the topic that you have written. I really love your last stanza, I like how you use the pillow as a comforter where we seek solace in. The tear stains acts as a testimonial of how many times we cried. Certainly a nice way to end this poem:)

  • 13 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    Very touching and beautiful write

    /Pillow hears night tales which comes to lay
    dried out heartaches dawn displays//
    ^^ totally loved these lines... well written :)