Comments : Summer nights

  • 13 years ago

    by tainted melody

    This was amazing you are better than me for sure and it making me jealous. lol ^_^

  • 13 years ago

    by Kuro

    Inside me empty and bare
    Cool breezes in the night air
    Feeling wind rush near my skin
    Loneliness starts sinking in

    the first line... maybe try "Inside I'm empty and bare..."

    or perhaps a comma to separate so they dont get confused "Inside me, empty and bare..."

    see the difference?

    anyway, this was a lovely write. the rhyming was good and the imagery was wonderful. nice job :)

    ~Kuro

  • 13 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Wow!!! This is definitely one of my favorites of yours!! I love it... It's sooo beautiful! I loved the unpredictable ending... It seemed like a happy poem in the beginning but changed completely towards the end! It felt very realistic... And i agree! It's hard to enjoy the beautiful things in life without someone by your side! I really enjoyed it... Everything about this poem is perfect... The flow and words chosen are all perfect!

    Excellent Job Sweety!!! :)

  • 13 years ago

    by RynZelara

    Agh, this one really pulled at me. The desire and need to have a companion is so strong sometimes for some, and it's a difficult feeling to cope with. Another of my favorites. *nod*

  • 12 years ago

    by Lost Innocence

    Very meaningful poem:D

  • 12 years ago

    by christopher

    Good poem i like it nice images and lovely scene used by choice words